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my daughter's poem# Parenting - 为人父母
f*g
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女儿就学的一段钢琴曲自己创做的一首诗歌.做母亲的觉的孩子满有创意的
Elude In D Minor Poem
"The sun shining brightly in the sky
Then suddenly it all goes black no one knows why
I hold on to something really tight
what could it be up there blocking the light?
I hear footsteps coming towards me yet no one is in sight
The footsteps getting louder and louder a monster I bet
But in the end all was clear
for that sound that I hear it was just my fear"
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D*e
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几岁了?
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f*g
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11
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D*e
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好好培养吧,很有艺术潜力。

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: 11
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l*t
5
very nice poem! she is talented!

【在 f*********g 的大作中提到】
: 女儿就学的一段钢琴曲自己创做的一首诗歌.做母亲的觉的孩子满有创意的
: Elude In D Minor Poem
: "The sun shining brightly in the sky
: Then suddenly it all goes black no one knows why
: I hold on to something really tight
: what could it be up there blocking the light?
: I hear footsteps coming towards me yet no one is in sight
: The footsteps getting louder and louder a monster I bet
: But in the end all was clear
: for that sound that I hear it was just my fear"

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f*g
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thanks
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m*i
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不懂英文poem(话说语言屏障比脑血屏障还要根深蒂固阿),
搁中文里是不错的打油诗:—)没贬义哦
其实写诗的年龄,在20岁左右的为众,意象丰富情感浓密语言干练(一句话可以成诗)
11岁的孩子模拟也不错,而且最好要大声读出来

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: 女儿就学的一段钢琴曲自己创做的一首诗歌.做母亲的觉的孩子满有创意的
: Elude In D Minor Poem
: "The sun shining brightly in the sky
: Then suddenly it all goes black no one knows why
: I hold on to something really tight
: what could it be up there blocking the light?
: I hear footsteps coming towards me yet no one is in sight
: The footsteps getting louder and louder a monster I bet
: But in the end all was clear
: for that sound that I hear it was just my fear"

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s*z
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11岁很有才啊!尤其前半段不错,结尾稍逊一点。但是才11岁呀,蛮有天赋!
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B*1
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goes --> went.
know --> knew
hold --> held
hear --> heard
is --> was
Good work!
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