乔帮主果然英明# PDA - 掌中宝
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succeed2010 (急性子) 于 (Fri Jan 14 13:55:23 2011, 美东) 提到:
今天回来一封推荐信，感觉好像被改了不少。信中绝大部分是介绍我做的工作。只有最
后有一些评论：
“xxx's experiment led to a novel insight that *********.
I have no doubt that xxx's future research will result in many more
exceptional contributions to the development of neurorestorative therapies
for the *** area. I can assuredly say that he is capable of delivering
substantially superior contributions than the majority of researches in his
field of endeavor. He is a brilliant researcher and will be an invaluable
asset to the scientific community. If these contributions are lost through
his absence, scientific advancements in this field will forfeit considerable
potential benefits. Consequently, I wholly support his petition for
permanent residency as an alien with outstanding ability. ”
主要是不知道“future”和“will”是不是不合适？
多谢大家！
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maxmartin (Jake) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:23:01 2011, 美东) 提到:
it looks like very strong letter for me
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succeed2010 (急性子) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:26:17 2011, 美东) 提到:
谢谢maxmartin，我感觉好一些了。主要是看着“future和will”，感觉碍眼。
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pptwo (pp) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:28:44 2011, 美东) 提到:
至少要有international, recognition, outstanding这样的keyword把，
而且开头就是future, will，感觉不好用。
his
considerable
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okman123456 (罪人) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:30:42 2011, 美东) 提到:
it is not good at the begining of the comment:
I have no doubt that xxx's future research will result in many more
exceptional contributions to the development of neurorestorative therapies
for the *** area.
otherwise it is a very strong letter.
anyway, if your NIU indeed, it is nothing.
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succeed2010 (急性子) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:37:19 2011, 美东) 提到:
谢谢大家！心凉了半截！看来得另外想办法了。
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tumiaomiao (苗翠花) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:58:43 2011, 美东) 提到:
看上去很强，跟推荐人商量一下能不能把will，in future之类的词去掉。
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TempKO (零工) 于 (Fri Jan 14 16:30:04 2011, 美东) 提到:
1. Since you are applying for EB1b, you want to put spotlight on your
achievements before making "predictions" (will, future, etc.)
2. Change "neurorestorative therapies" to layman's words.
3. If in the main text there too are many such jargons, revamp the letter.
4. "Extraordinary" > "..." > "Exceptional". For EB1b, your phrases should
be where "..." is.
succeed2010 (急性子) 于 (Fri Jan 14 13:55:23 2011, 美东) 提到:
今天回来一封推荐信，感觉好像被改了不少。信中绝大部分是介绍我做的工作。只有最
后有一些评论：
“xxx's experiment led to a novel insight that *********.
I have no doubt that xxx's future research will result in many more
exceptional contributions to the development of neurorestorative therapies
for the *** area. I can assuredly say that he is capable of delivering
substantially superior contributions than the majority of researches in his
field of endeavor. He is a brilliant researcher and will be an invaluable
asset to the scientific community. If these contributions are lost through
his absence, scientific advancements in this field will forfeit considerable
potential benefits. Consequently, I wholly support his petition for
permanent residency as an alien with outstanding ability. ”
主要是不知道“future”和“will”是不是不合适？
多谢大家！
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maxmartin (Jake) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:23:01 2011, 美东) 提到:
it looks like very strong letter for me
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succeed2010 (急性子) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:26:17 2011, 美东) 提到:
谢谢maxmartin，我感觉好一些了。主要是看着“future和will”，感觉碍眼。
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pptwo (pp) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:28:44 2011, 美东) 提到:
至少要有international, recognition, outstanding这样的keyword把，
而且开头就是future, will，感觉不好用。
his
considerable
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okman123456 (罪人) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:30:42 2011, 美东) 提到:
it is not good at the begining of the comment:
I have no doubt that xxx's future research will result in many more
exceptional contributions to the development of neurorestorative therapies
for the *** area.
otherwise it is a very strong letter.
anyway, if your NIU indeed, it is nothing.
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succeed2010 (急性子) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:37:19 2011, 美东) 提到:
谢谢大家！心凉了半截！看来得另外想办法了。
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tumiaomiao (苗翠花) 于 (Fri Jan 14 14:58:43 2011, 美东) 提到:
看上去很强，跟推荐人商量一下能不能把will，in future之类的词去掉。
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TempKO (零工) 于 (Fri Jan 14 16:30:04 2011, 美东) 提到:
1. Since you are applying for EB1b, you want to put spotlight on your
achievements before making "predictions" (will, future, etc.)
2. Change "neurorestorative therapies" to layman's words.
3. If in the main text there too are many such jargons, revamp the letter.
4. "Extraordinary" > "..." > "Exceptional". For EB1b, your phrases should
be where "..." is.
