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w*s2010-09-29 07:09

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把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
掌声。
We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
it.
We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

m*y2010-09-29 07:09

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鼓掌

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

p*g2010-09-29 07:09

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刚上一年级？这个作文太值得喝彩了，全篇几乎没什么语法错误，行文也很流畅，虽然
有点流水账的感觉，但是这对一个一年级的孩子来说已经非常不错了。鼓掌！！

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

P*s2010-09-29 07:09

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光这字数，我就被震撼了

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

r*d2010-09-29 07:09

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比我的中文都好。

a*e2010-09-29 07:09

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这是一年级的娃娃写的？鼓掌，巴掌拍红了得鼓，啪啪啪

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

J*C2010-09-29 07:09

7 楼

一个字，牛！

e*e2010-09-29 07:09

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小娃娃刚开始写作文，都是流水账。不信你看看国内一年级小朋友的中文作文，也是一
样的。

【在 p*******g 的大作中提到】

: 刚上一年级？这个作文太值得喝彩了，全篇几乎没什么语法错误，行文也很流畅，虽然
: 有点流水账的感觉，但是这对一个一年级的孩子来说已经非常不错了。鼓掌！！
:
: us
: was
: cross
: there.

e*e2010-09-29 07:09

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鼓掌~~~~

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

w*s2010-09-29 07:09

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是非常的流水帐啊。而且重点没有写。我们跟他说要加入更多的细节，可能就是因为这
个，就更加流水帐了。句子之间也没有连接好。
多谢大家鼓掌，儿子很高兴大家夸奖他呢。

p*g2010-09-29 07:09

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这个年龄的孩子哪个不写流水账的，孩子的语言能力已经很强了，以后大了文章的结构
性，逻辑性自然就好了，你家娃一定在同龄人力算很出色的。

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 是非常的流水帐啊。而且重点没有写。我们跟他说要加入更多的细节，可能就是因为这
: 个，就更加流水帐了。句子之间也没有连接好。
: 多谢大家鼓掌，儿子很高兴大家夸奖他呢。

c*u2010-09-29 07:09

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非常赞！

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

s*n2010-09-29 07:09

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Then my
friend let me play his Iphone.
真是有钱人啊，这帮一年级小孩都用IPHONE了啊

m*o2010-09-29 07:09

14 楼

行云流水啊！
手和脚同鼓掌！！！

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

s*92010-09-29 07:09

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这字数就够牛的, 更别提内容的.
怎么推的?

l*e2010-09-29 07:09

16 楼

太牛了

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

w*s2010-09-29 07:09

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儿子的reading和writing在同龄人里算不错的吧，特别是reading。他的老师说其实他
能写的很好，但不耐心。即使是这边文章也能看出来的。虽然都是流水帐，前面就写了
很多，后面就匆匆结束了。说明一下，我们离有钱人太遥远了，我们是单职工家庭，目
前只能管温饱。那个Iphone是朋友的，他给他儿子玩，然后他儿子又给我儿子玩。

f*n2010-09-29 07:09

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很不错呀，鼓掌！

z*i2010-09-29 07:09

19 楼

牛啊牛

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot

l*g2010-09-29 07:09

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niu ah

us
was
cross
there.

【在 w******s 的大作中提到】

: 把儿子的作文发在这里，如果有人鼓掌的话，也好鼓励儿子多写点。
: 儿子刚上一年级，断断续续地把我们上次去掉螃蟹的事儿写了下来。做过路过的，给点
: 掌声。
: We went to Eastern Neck Wildlife Refuge with two other families. It took us
: 2 hours to get there. On the way we had to cross 4 bridges. The first one
: wasn't very long. The second was as long as the first one. The third one was
: very very long. It was so long that part of it looked like the London
: Bridge. The fourth one was so short that it only took us one minute to cross
: it.
: We drove and drove and turned into a parking lot