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在没有方向的风中，开始跳舞吧(t)(3)

在没有方向的风中，开始跳舞吧(t)(3)# Translation - 译林

or2003-09-16 07:09

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I sprang to my feet from the dry reeds at the appearance of the king and the
girl. A long and pleasant dream seemed to have swept away my blues presently.
“This is Ithil.” said the king.
The girl panted, perhaps because she had just climbed onto the roof.
“Nice to meet you, young lady.” I greeted her.
“Nice to meet you.”
Her voice came half an arm beneath my eyes. I leaned forward to listen
closely. Her silvery voice was tinged with huskiness typical for youth. She
must be about 15 or 16

or2003-09-16 07:09

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//tears
i was trying so hard to be smooth..

Her
upon
fishy
house
was
when
it
old
and
long.

s*l2003-09-16 07:09

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I'd try my best now although it might not be 100% correct...

I dont quite understand what is 'pull to'
my blues disappeared.
~~~led
delicately with footsteps, followed by weak echos occasionally
wooden
came
led wooden
how many have been
doesn't
her age
"flui

【在 or 的大作中提到】

: //tears
: i was trying so hard to be smooth..
:
: Her
: upon
: fishy
: house
: was
: when
: it

or2003-09-16 07:09

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//blush, thanks, i felt like forcing myself on you.. good work, pls keep it up
ah.
the original is in jhq. there's also online dictionary www.dictionary.com
that i frequently checked.
"lead", and a few grammatical errors are good picks.
wood can be adj. spread can be vt. "mused" was meant to be "guessed", i was
avoiding "guess", "think" that have been repeated too much. i changed it to
"pondered" tho. same to "be gone" instead of "disappear", to be more
classic//grin

gone.
disappeared.
He

【在 s***l 的大作中提到】

: I'd try my best now although it might not be 100% correct...
:
: I dont quite understand what is 'pull to'
: my blues disappeared.
: ~~~led
: delicately with footsteps, followed by weak echos occasionally
: wooden
: came
: led wooden
: how many have been

s*l2003-09-16 07:09

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one can say 'spread rumors' but I don't feel all right with
'spread corners'. if you want to use be gone, you'd use 'was gone' I think.
I found the cambridge dict pretty handy too.
http://dictionary.cambridge.org/

【在 or 的大作中提到】

: //blush, thanks, i felt like forcing myself on you.. good work, pls keep it up
: ah.
: the original is in jhq. there's also online dictionary www.dictionary.com
: that i frequently checked.
: "lead", and a few grammatical errors are good picks.
: wood can be adj. spread can be vt. "mused" was meant to be "guessed", i was
: avoiding "guess", "think" that have been repeated too much. i changed it to
: "pondered" tho. same to "be gone" instead of "disappear", to be more
: classic//grin
:

or2003-09-16 07:09

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sounds reasonable. i'll recheck later. your website looks cool.

it up
was
to

【在 s***l 的大作中提到】

: one can say 'spread rumors' but I don't feel all right with
: 'spread corners'. if you want to use be gone, you'd use 'was gone' I think.
: I found the cambridge dict pretty handy too.
: http://dictionary.cambridge.org/

or2003-09-16 07:09

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highhand ah, i agree on most of them, except a few. and those few might
simply was bcoz you didn't see the original..
like "led" used twice, it was intentionally done.
i gotta correct this piece again..

the
Her
upon
fishy
house
was
sigh

or2003-09-16 07:09

8 楼

coool. many you mentioned touched on my sore spots that i hadn't been sure
of.
one thing is "when the air ...." can be used as a cong2ju4 to xiu1shi4 the
zhu3yu3 "sound" bah.

gone.
Her
about
eyes?
upon
fishy
house
thunderstorm.
was
to
the
sigh
screeches.
and
and
carefully
The
to
around.
at

or2003-09-16 07:09

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with comma "when...." will be zhuang4yu3cong2ju4. without comma it is
zhu3yu3cong2ju4 and is part of zhu3yu3.

sure

or2003-09-16 07:09

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it's all right to have a comma btw a long zhu3yu3 and the following weiyu and
bingyu. i saw it pretty often. you can also have commas to divide zhu3yu3
itself.
say: "a, b, and c, are blah..blah." they are grammatically correct.
ofcoz to polish style is another case.

by
air..."

or2003-09-16 07:09

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b, c can be xiu1shi4yu3 for a.
ex: "Sir Walter Elliot, of Kellynch Hall, in Somersetshire, was a man who, for
his own amusement, never took up any book but the Baronetage."

or2003-09-16 07:09

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hehe b,c can be either parallel or subjective to a.
"A quarter of an hour, twenty minutes, passed away.." (parallel)

or2003-09-16 07:09

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hehe ask you one thing:
"autumn, is coming." is this correct?

or2003-09-16 07:09

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hmm i got an unrelated question.
"i did a, did b." is this correct?

say
seven

or2003-09-16 07:09

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i know that in sense of scientific publication. but i saw that pretty often
in literary works.

will
would
to
by

or2003-09-16 07:09

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//curious
a noun. or a few is sometimes a sentence in literary works. is it allowed in
your "formal writing"?

it's
often
our

s*l2003-09-16 07:09

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definitely no

【在 or 的大作中提到】

: hmm i got an unrelated question.
: "i did a, did b." is this correct?
:
: say
: seven

or2003-09-16 07:09

18 楼

i noticed your correction to my piece.
hmm yesterday checked three novels, "princess bride" - american popular
fiction.
"dance, dance, dance"- translated from japanese,
"remembrance of things past"-translated from french.
this structure appeared in all the three, especially in the first, on almost
every page. and its author is a reputated playwright whose works won oscar.
he messed up grammar so obviously? i am freaked out.
so whose is right neh?//think not hard
i reckon in literature there's

【在 s***l 的大作中提到】

: definitely no

s*l2003-09-16 07:09

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Could you put some examles here?
Or could you find such structure on the internet so that everybody
can see?

【在 or 的大作中提到】

: i noticed your correction to my piece.
: hmm yesterday checked three novels, "princess bride" - american popular
: fiction.
: "dance, dance, dance"- translated from japanese,
: "remembrance of things past"-translated from french.
: this structure appeared in all the three, especially in the first, on almost
: every page. and its author is a reputated playwright whose works won oscar.
: he messed up grammar so obviously? i am freaked out.
: so whose is right neh?//think not hard
: i reckon in literature there's

or2003-09-16 07:09

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"Inigo quickly tied it(the rope) aound a rock, dropped it over."

s*l2003-09-16 07:09

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我在网上查了一下关于复合句(comlex sentences)的用法。
首先一点，复合句一般可以用1，分号或者2，逗号后的
并列连词(coordinating conjunction)分割两个子句。常用的并列连词
有and 和 but. (The others are or, for, yet, and so.)
Quote:
"When you compound whole sentences, a comma before the conjunction
marks the place where one clause ends and the next begins. When more
than two sentences are compounded, the conjunction usually appears
between only the last two, while the others are separated by commas.
"
所以你举的后两个例子其实是有连词的。前三个出自同一部作品，也许有作者
的个人偏好问题。我觉得他是为了强调动作的因果关系，其

【在 or 的大作中提到】

: "Inigo quickly tied it(the rope) aound a rock, dropped it over."

or2003-09-16 07:09

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;P
mine was an error. and thanks for your correction. for foreigners like us
it's safer to stick to strict grammar instead of playing around. just there's
no "definitely" in this case.;) there are more even in a journal like
"chemical and engineering news", and more in "swann's way", without conj., but
alas, they might be all mistakes or peculiar occurences.

from
fondled
paperback,

【在 s***l 的大作中提到】

: 我在网上查了一下关于复合句(comlex sentences)的用法。
: 首先一点，复合句一般可以用1，分号或者2，逗号后的
: 并列连词(coordinating conjunction)分割两个子句。常用的并列连词
: 有and 和 but. (The others are or, for, yet, and so.)
: Quote:
: "When you compound whole sentences, a comma before the conjunction
: marks the place where one clause ends and the next begins. When more
: than two sentences are compounded, the conjunction usually appears
: between only the last two, while the others are separated by commas.
: "

s*l2003-09-16 07:09

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//hand or mm.:)

【在 or 的大作中提到】

: ;P
: mine was an error. and thanks for your correction. for foreigners like us
: it's safer to stick to strict grammar instead of playing around. just there's
: no "definitely" in this case.;) there are more even in a journal like
: "chemical and engineering news", and more in "swann's way", without conj., but
: alas, they might be all mistakes or peculiar occurences.
:
: from
: fondled
: paperback,

l*y2003-09-16 07:09

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i've seen 1,2,3,4,5,6,7. in a good writing piece. but it is like
a is this, b is that, c is this, d is that.
also seen a lot of things like "a did 1, doing 2, doing 3... "
"I retreated from the room, walking towards(pass? by?) the stairs." is
passable, me think.
we do read a lot, literature/written or just everyday english. but we don't
pay attention to the grammer that much. :/

there's
but

【在 or 的大作中提到】

or2003-09-16 07:09

25 楼

let me make a summary out of our discussions.;P
according to strict classic grammar, we can have:
a is this; b is that; c is this; d is that.
a did this, did that, ....and (but, then, etc. conj.) did that.
a did this, doing that.
but in literature and everyday english, grammar goes loose, and the following
types are not rare:
a is this, b is that, c is this, d is that.
a did this, did that.
moreover, grammar in e. fanfic can be careless. i was corrupted by them.;P

us
note
the

【在 l***y 的大作中提到】

: i've seen 1,2,3,4,5,6,7. in a good writing piece. but it is like
: a is this, b is that, c is this, d is that.
: also seen a lot of things like "a did 1, doing 2, doing 3... "
: "I retreated from the room, walking towards(pass? by?) the stairs." is
: passable, me think.
: we do read a lot, literature/written or just everyday english. but we don't
: pay attention to the grammer that much. :/
:
: there's
: but

or2003-09-16 07:09

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ai我只喜欢舞舞舞，现实里混合了童话色彩，就象鲜鸡蛋与咸鸭蛋打散了
一起蒸一样。。;P 其它的村上小说我总觉得矫情的说。

境
popular

l*y2003-09-16 07:09

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i only read the english version of norwegian woods, it's ok.

仙
on
won
non-grammar,

【在 or 的大作中提到】

: ai我只喜欢舞舞舞，现实里混合了童话色彩，就象鲜鸡蛋与咸鸭蛋打散了
: 一起蒸一样。。;P 其它的村上小说我总觉得矫情的说。
:
: 境
: popular

l*y2003-09-16 07:09

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need to hibernate. it's almost winter...

or2003-09-16 07:09

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i heard today or some day this week is the 1st day of autumn..
dont hibernate ah, otherwise or as a beta reader will be jobless leh.

【在 l***y 的大作中提到】

: need to hibernate. it's almost winter...

l*y2003-09-16 07:09

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it.
//hug

or2003-09-16 07:09

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hm i visited your homepage of writing pieces once, and it's fascinating.
(i am hearing antenna is yelling "where? where?? transfer them here bah.");P

【在 l***y 的大作中提到】

: it.
: //hug

s*l2003-09-16 07:09

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it's this morning. hehe

【在 or 的大作中提到】

: i heard today or some day this week is the 1st day of autumn..
: dont hibernate ah, otherwise or as a beta reader will be jobless leh.

p*e2003-09-16 07:09

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秋分, Autumn Equinox :)

【在 s***l 的大作中提到】

: it's this morning. hehe

l*y2003-09-16 07:09

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just saw this in a sw fanfic:
"The former padawan watched him through the window, smiling indulgently, and
put the teapot on."
:P
em, if you are wondering, "padawan" means jedi apprentice. former padawan
means, in here, a jedi just kneighted, meaning that he has graduated, achieved
independence, and can have apprentice of his own. sounds like a phD hehe.

following
don't
conj.,

【在 or 的大作中提到】

: let me make a summary out of our discussions.;P
: according to strict classic grammar, we can have:
: a is this; b is that; c is this; d is that.
: a did this, did that, ....and (but, then, etc. conj.) did that.
: a did this, doing that.
: but in literature and everyday english, grammar goes loose, and the following
: types are not rare:
: a is this, b is that, c is this, d is that.
: a did this, did that.
: moreover, grammar in e. fanfic can be careless. i was corrupted by them.;P