【自由的心】（A heart of freedom)

受到网友waterfowl和方外居士的启发，第一次作散文诗。。。

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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赞！古诗自由诗都写过了，还缺英文诗。：）

众生都围着笼子看 还是当年菜市口那群人！～～～哇，精彩，赞！

哇，这个诗评瞬间升华了文字的高度～

谢谢方外兄。赞读诗的眼光。

我的时间、能力均有限，现在我借助ChatGPT（见内）。满意80%，但它有一处重大误解，我暂且放在那里，不指出。

Translation by ChatGPT (manually edited slightly)

"Freedom of the Heart"

 

The cage, it may confine your physical form,

But it can't hold your spirit, bold and warm,

It can't block the summon distantly called,

From a far-off spring, enthralled.

 

While all beings slumber sound,

You, on the open meadow, bound,

People, through bleary eyes, peer and peep,

Whispering secrets, opinions, deep.

 

The minions have you confined,

Accusing you of raising too much dust, unkind.

The masses gather around the cage,

Like the folks at an execution ground in a bygone age.

 

Tall walls obscure the sky so blue,

Carrots and sticks, lips sealed, they chew,

In eateries, theaters, and velvet tents,

How many lures invites?

 

Life is short, indeed,

Yet your heart takes the lead.

Until the cages turn to earth and dust,

Under the sun and moon, freedom is a must.

 

AI’s comments (unchanged):

This is a beautifully crafted poem that conveys a profound message about the resilience of the human spirit and the innate desire for freedom, despite physical or societal constraints.

The metaphor of the cage serves as a powerful symbol throughout the poem, representing the limitations and boundaries imposed by society, while the spirit represents the enduring human desire to break free and seek a life unrestrained by external influences.

The poem touches on the idea that even when the world is asleep or indifferent to one's dreams and aspirations, one can find the strength to pursue their own path, even in the face of skepticism and criticism from others. The mention of "whispering secrets, opinions, deep" reflects the tendency of society to judge and constrain those who dare to step out of line.

The poem also underscores the fleeting nature of life, reminding us that time is limited and that we should follow the call of our hearts. It encourages us to persist in our pursuit of freedom and self-discovery, regardless of the barriers that may exist, as true freedom is found within ourselves.

The imagery of the "cages turning to earth and dust" underlines the idea that, in the end, the physical and societal limitations will not endure, and what remains is the enduring spirit that seeks freedom under the "sun and moon."

Overall, "Freedom of the Heart" is a profound and evocative poem that resonates with readers by celebrating the unbreakable human spirit's yearning for freedom and self-expression.

昏，上班中，匆匆扫一眼，又闹了个乌龙。原来那句是引用的原诗。太不好意思了。：））

你就是摆100次乌龙都不怨你。哪怕每个人说个Hi，你也不容易的。

谢谢理解。：））原诗中的那一句确实好！

Carrots or sticks, chew or lips sealed, better than ...

change "Carrots and sticks, lips sealed, they chew," to 

"Carrots or sticks: they chew, or lips sealed."

Carrots or sticks, chew or lips sealed, better than the original, as you can have either one, not both. 

好精彩的诗，佩服！

水禽兄过奖了，我是借您的东风。

您的意思更明确。AI可能更为了照顾押韵。。。但它在评论中是有曲解的，它不能理解一些细微的地方。大背景它也不太行。

它原来把“菜市口”翻译成 marketplace，我已经修改了。有些事情至少现在机器还是是不懂的。

另外，它把标题译成 Freedom of Heart，和我想说的 A Heart of Freedom，也有细微差别的。

欢迎回来，最近都没见到你。很忙吗？：））

+100

唐兄第一次写自由诗，很好的尝试，赞！

BTW, “A Heart of Freedom” is free verse, not prose poem :)

自由诗 (free verse) 和散文诗 (prose poem) 是两个不同的诗歌类别，二者的区别见里面的几个链接：

 

自由体诗_百度百科 (baidu.com)

散文诗（现代抒情文学体裁）_百度百科 (baidu.com)

Free verse | Poetry Foundation

Prose poem | Poetry Foundation

What is Prose Poetry? | Writing Forward